Thanks a lot for the quick response, that was really helpful. I'm just going to reply to your points because it helps me understand what you're saying.
Yeah, I know I messed up a little on my 'esses', I find proof reading in Quest a little difficult just because of how it's setup. I can definitely improve upon that. The same would apply to my use of commas and 'though(s)', I know I tend to overuse them but I often find it hard to actually find good alternatives. That all just comes with writing experience I imagine, so more writing for me!
I would like to know more about what you said of the length of the passages though. How long is too long? I felt that one sentence describing a place would be too little, but this kind of feedback is just what I need to understand if that's not the case and why.
The exits are actually my biggest grief with the Quest system, just how they work in general, but I'll make sure to put more effort into explaining just where things are in the future. The same sort of thing applies to the 'talk to man' problem you had. I realized what I did after I submitted it, but honestly I was too lazy to fix it. The reason you got 'drink' for instance was because it was 'man's drink' as an alternative name I believe. I thought making the name have ownership from the man was a good idea, but I guess it's just unnecessary anyway.
Okay, there's my little explanation. If I'm being daft on something please call me out on it so I don't continue on being so.
And thanks again for the critique, appreciate you taking the time.