More typos, etc:
- First page: You decide weather [whether] you should wake up, or go back to sleep.
- You swing wide the door that secures all your fashion desires. You browse for some time, and you cant [can't] seem to choose between three of the outfits you've chosen. Although you realise that time wont [won't] wait for your decsision [decision].
- Acheivement [Achievement] Unlocked Zombie...
- The Kitchen [kitchen] is dark, [no comma] and almost seems as if its [it's] pleading to be filled with light once more. You turn on the switch, [period] a [A] small kitchen comes into full view. You decide to either make cereal, grab something quick to eat, or to [delete "to"] go and get dressed. (If you want to leave "to" on the last one, then you need it on all of them.)
- You open the closet [closet in the kitchen? cupboard, pantry?] door, undecided on what ceral [cereal] will suit your needs, [period] you [You] choose carefully.
- You continue twoards [towards] your vehicle; [comma] a fancy, red Hyundai Sonata.
- Eight minuets [minutes] have passed since hearing that noise.
- You yet again press the button, just wishing the next time it wont [won't] go off again. BEEP BEEP BEEP Eight minuets [minutes] have passed since hearing that noise.
- The living room slumbers near the outsidee [outside] street lamp, [I have no idea what that means] as light illuminates through your small windows into your living room. [I normally think of "illuminates" as a transitive verb, one needing an object. You illuminate something, cause it to light up. The light illuminates the living room. The flashlight illuminates the wall. A candle illuminates a room. I don't know if the way you have it could be accepted in some off way, but it sounds odd to me.]
- You decide to watch some television, lay [lie] on the couch for a while, or to [delete "to"] go and get dressed. (If you want to leave "to" on the last one, then you need it on all of them.)
- You light the match with the silver lighter, and instantainiously a flame ignites. [http://english.stackexchange.com/questions/42168/difference-between-instantly-and-instantaneously]
- You inhale the cigarette, and upon inhailing [inhaling], you find yourself desperatly [desperately] grasping air. ["grasping air"? "gasping for air"?] Your [You're] still able to get dressed if you are quick, and this might be your last chance.
- You insist [add "on"] continuing to harm yourself. This time you start to choke, [period] its [It's] getting pretty ugly, trying to smoke the cigar. [I thought it was a cigarette.] You cant [can't] go back now,[period] might [You might] as well continue smoking.
- You inhale, and you start to suffocate, [period] your [Your] lungs bocome [become] blocked with smoke. You try to reach for the phone on the wall, but you [add "are"] unable to do so.
- Acheivement [Achievement] Unlocked: Smoked
- You wear ankle-high socks, [no comma] and a yellow sports bra, [no comma] and panties.
Other problem: restarting the game sometimes yields black text on a black background.